Kevins peer-review of "?"

1. The thesis is clear - For this reason it is difficult to deconstruct the lyrics to this song to, or find an over all message. It deals with the rhetoric used within the song but also the subject matter. It states that the text and videos are not your everyday contemporary music, but rather inspired by strong visuals and altered perception from the effects of LSD. This makes it hard to understand, because they were thinking in a different perspective from the LSD. The video is full of things that wouldn't make sense to a sober human being. It also referes to another song which makes you question some of the content of "I am the Walrus." This adds to the idea that we don't really know what they meant, at least we don't know while thinking soberly.

2. The writer does provide examples within the text supporting his argument.
-the chorus is shown as an example of randomness
-another song is refereed to called "The Glass Onion" which speaks of this song
-the line about penguins kicking Edgar Allan Poe shows the craziness of the trip
-the costumes in the video were mentioned
-the style of the video is different from most, background, theme, sounds, etc
He could use some more examples including,
-the ethos of the beatles and how that effects their message
-he could add how the song compares to their other music
-he could add more examples from the actual text to simulate the idea of the unknown
As far as the argument as a whole, the intent could be more descriptive. I got the idea of it being different, but its overshadowed by the effects of LSD. I dont know if there is a point.

3. The writer does provide an analysis of his examples. He states that they are altered by the drugs. The whole group of the beatles and who they were explained as support. Also, the comparison with the comments of John Lenon was a good analysis to the current day ghetto slang. The writer could provide some more analysis including:
-more about the meaning of the costumes
-the video effets on the mind and how it is percieved
-analyze the effects of the music on the current culture
-analyze what it was like to actually be able to come up with those lyrics

4. The idea of how this whole song was made stuck to me the most. LSD strongly influenced this music and that is seen through the song. The paper was interesting and had some comical references that made me chuckle. This is probably most vivid to me because I have seen the effects of LSD and it boggles the mind how powerful it is, and the complete shift of perception and reality.