Peer Review for Austin Chandler "Dance"

I just read Austin Chandler's essay and the first thought that came to my mind is that this essay is written very well for being just a first draft. The author has used many examples for both the text and video portion of this song.
1) Is there a clear thesis? What is it? Does it deal with rhetoric or subject matter? Does the writer identify the argument of the text and video? What is the argument?
There is a clear thesis which is the writer is trying to convince the reader that the pain that comes with the end of a relationship is worth the experience. I do think that the subject matter is stated very well in this piece. The whole beginning of a relationship, the high and lows of the relationship and the inevitable end of the relationship. What I got from this thesis personally is that in life you have to take the good with the bad no matter what because you learn from it in the end and build from it.
2) Does the writer provide specific support/examples from the text and video.
Both the text and video give an enormous amount of examples such as:
a) In the first part of the song, it refers to “the dance we shared ‘neath the stars above”, reflecting a romantic scene that was playing out in the story that the writer is telling. In the second verse, the writer talks about how “for a moment wasn’t I a king.” This imagery is used to illustrate that he was feeling on top of the world when he was dancing with that special person. The king imagery goes on to the next line, with him saying “But if I’d only know how the king would fall.” The fall represents how hurtful it would be to leave or be left by his dancing partner.
b) At one point, you see President John F. Kennedy with his family, showing their private dance. He also shared a public dance with the American people as their president. It was horrible that he was assassinated so young in life, but the people would still want him to be the president knowing he would die.
c) Next, Martin Luther King Jr. is shown holding one of his children and talking with his wife. If Martin Luther King hadn’t fought for civil rights, we would have been in a very different world, which makes his sacrifice even more important.
d) The actor John Wayne and his wife are another pair. He was a great movie star who died of cancer. His example sends the message that if even if he had not been film, we would not have the types of westerns and classic movies that we have today.
e) Also, the crew of the space shuttle Challenger is shown preparing to board the ship, not that they will return to Earth.
3) Does the writer provide analysis of his or her support/examples? Do the examples help the thesis? How could the writer provide further analysis? List some examples that could use more analysis?
Yes the writer provide analysis of this or her support/examples which is stated in the above section through his personal views. I think personally all the examples Austin used was put together very well, they flowed smoothly. It made me want to read the essay more when it end which was the only bad thing about it. The only thing that the writer could provide for further analysis is more indepth information of each character such as John Wayne and Martin Luther King Jr. Other than that this essay was very enjoyable to read which is saying something from my perspective to say the least.
4) What is the one thing that sticks with you from the essay? Why do you think it's most vivid to you?
I think for me personally the one thing that sticks for this essay is the word imagery, because it connects each part of the song and video. Without it, it leaves you hanging in a way that makes it look abstract. It gives transition throughout the piece.
-By Mark Lundh