Peer Review of Mark Lundh Essay

Austin Chandler 2/11/09
English 102 Peer Review

Peer Review of Mark Lundh Essay
1. The thesis in Mark’s essay is “The Killers lyrics looks at this topic and talks about the struggle between life and death.” This thesis is very clear. His thesis deals more with the subject matter of the song. Mark does identify the argument of the text and video. The argument is about how we deal with life and death.
2. The writer does use specific examples from the video and text. However, the writer forgot to put a link to the music video for the song.
Text Examples:
A. “I did my best to notice, when the call came down the line, Up to the platform of surrender, I was brought but I was kind, And sometimes I get nervous, When I see an open door, Close your eyes, Clear your heart, Cut the cord.”, which talks about the call from heaven. Whether or not we have a choice to go or keep on fighting.
B. “Are we human? Or are we dance?”
C. “Wave goodbye, Wish me well, you’ve got to let me go.”
Video examples:
A. “The video starts off by having the group in a canyon of some sort singing this song with the sun blazing. You start by noticing the lack of vegetation, water, and any abundance of animals pretty much immediately. One face’s in life with regards to the physical, emotional, and spiritual being.”
B. “Then the video shows us an array of animals such as a white tiger, a cougar, and a condor. The most fascinating of these animals is the condor. The video shows us a collection of mirror with various images of each group member appearing and then disappearing which this author feels could represent the various views of life or how you perceive yourself and your surroundings.”
C. “Then the video shows each person in the group standing with a picture of themselves covering their face, then pictures being switched with each other. The end of the video shows the group facing away from the sun (towards you) then the day turns into night, sun into the moon.”
D. “Then the group is facing towards the moon, when all of a sudden the night and the moon turn to a painting. Absolute stillness!”
He could have used other examples to be more descriptive with his analysis.
Examples to use:
A. “Will your system be alrightWhen you dream of home tonight?There is no message we’re receivingLet me know is your heart still beating”
B. “My sign is vitalMy hands are coldAnd I’m on my kneesLooking for the answer”
3. The writer does provide good analysis of his support and examples. These examples help support his thesis. He could provide further analysis on certain areas.
Examples of more analysis:
A. “The song depicts the letting go of various virtues that one possesses during one’s life such as grace, virtue, good, kindness, and love.”-What else could these lyrics mean?
B. “The white tiger and cougar represents mans basic instinct for survival and the frailty of the human body.”-How do these animals represent survival and frailty?
If the writer elaborates more on what his analysis mean his paper will be stronger for it.
4. The thing that sticks with me from the essay is how his uses his beliefs in his essay. His beliefs add a personal dimension to his essay.