peer review for brandy

I thought that the thesis was very clear in the paper it says “She is speaking as if she was a boy. She speaks as if she was in a relationship, everything she would do.” This clearly states what the song is all about and it also states what the argument of the song is. The thesis does clearly state what the rhetoric of the song is all about, because the song is talking about what she would do on the other side of the relationship. I think you got the argument of the song down just right.
Thought out your whole paper you are constantly proving the reader with quotes form the song. I think this is really helpful to the reader because then they know exactly where you are coming from. I really like how you quoted form the song and then explained it afterwards I thought that it was very helpful. The only other place I think that you could have added more detail was maybe in the part about where you talked about the video. I feel like you could have described the argument of the video better.
I think that you did a very good job with explaining all of your examples. I also feel that all of you examples supported your thesis very well. I don’t know that you could have put more analysis in with your examples because your paper was all examples the description. So I think that you did a great jot with that. The only part that you might want to add a little more is in the part about the video.
One part that really stuck out to me in the paper was when in the song it says I would listen to her, this stuck out just because I thin that it is one think that every needs to do better. I think that is was must vivid to me just because it makes so much sense she wouldn’t be complaining about the boy if he would just listen.