Peer Review on Nicole Brittain song "Spotlight"by Jennifer Hudson

“Prisoner of Love”

In the first two paragraphs Nicole talked about Jennifer Hudson’s life before and after she won a Golden Globe and an Oscar for her role in the movie “Dream Girls”. The thesis is there but it should have been outlined in the first of second paragraph of Nicole’s essay. This would have made it clear enough to the readers. In my opinion Nicole could have addressed what message the audience received from the song, for example “Jennifer Hudson proves to the listeners how some men are not secured in their relationship with their woman. Nicole still got the message across to her audience.

The Thesis could have read. “Jennifer Hudson proved to her audience how controlling her relationship with her man is and how she feels like a “Prisoner of Love” in her relationship or words to that effect.

The Thesis of the writer is “Are you a guard in a prison maximum security?” (Prisoner of Love). The writer does explain the above statement of how “Jennifer asks this question to get to the basis of what her song is about. She does not want to be “locked away out of fear that [She’ll] find someone else” quote. Nicole’s thesis deals with the Rhetoric through out the paper just like the video states.

The argument in the video speaks for it self it has great imagery and tone. It shows in the artist face the frustrated she is going through in this relationship and it is clear that she is a prisoner of love in her relationship

In the video the spotlight on stage where Jennifer was performing for her man as he set in the chair, the spotlight was shining on him and it interfered with his vision. The directors showed the viewers how her man felt when he was in the spotlight light. When you watch that part of the video her man move his hands up over his face to protect his eyes because there was too much light shining on him, this is a good example of a logo and imagery and the point the director was trying to get across to the audience.

Nicole does provided specific supporting examples and so does the video. In the beginning of the video Jennifer is on the phone with her girlfriend, she clicks over to talk to her men, he is talking to her in a very rough tone of voice and sound like a stalker.

Nicole does provide specific support in her text about the thesis. This is a very good example, “Do we stay home all the time cause you want me to yourself?”

Nicole also use the chorus of the song as her supporting text: “Ms. Hudson makes a stand. Loud and proud she sings to her beau. “I don’t like, living under your spotlight, just because you think I might, find somebody worthy.”

There are a couple of examples Nicole could have included: As Jennifer walk thought the alley while singing that could have been a sign of her walking away from the relationship.

Nicole could have gone into more details about the scene when Jennifer and her man were in the club and she took him into the other room. That scène could have been a sign of embarrassment on Jennifer’s part because she didn’t want anyone to know her man is so jealous that he stalks her.

Nicole could have been more descriptive when she talked about how the “majority of the video is then focused on Jennifer singing her song”. She could have been more descriptive of showing how the video helps convey the emotion and strength felt in the song by her man.

Nicole’s supporting text of her analyzing the song “Spotlight” is very good. Halfway though the video it shows her man stalking her by following her every footstep and showing up at the club, a good example of a logo. At the same time she tells him “You ought to be ashamed of yourself, what do you think you’re doing?” “Loving me, loving me so wrong.” She pulls her man into her as if she’s going to kiss him. She then pushes him away. It seems as though she’s saying, I love you but let me love you rather than make me.” This is a good example of one of the many pathos in the video.

Another good example of the Nicole analyzing and supporting text of her essay is the last two paragraphs at the end of the essay:

“The final verse of the song is the bottom line of what she wants her boyfriend to know. “…All I do is try to show you that you’re my one and only guy, no matter who may come along…”.
What I gathered from reading listening to this song is a sense of feminine strength in a relationship. Perhaps Jennifer felt objectified by her boyfriend, rather than human. I think the fact that she is an artist very much in the real life “spotlight”, is an irony. The song leaves you wondering what would become of their relationship had it been true?”

The one thing that stuck out for me in the essay is the stance “Are you a guard in a prison maximum security?” The verse is very vivid to me in what the writer is trying to convey. When I hear the words “maximum security” I think of a prison and that does relate to Jennifer Hudson relationship with her man. Good Job Nicole.!